PP: Personal Statement
Something new…
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Sample
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Past
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Present
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Future
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1
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· Previous Education: UC Berkeley
· Previous Job: Cambridge Univ Press
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· Critical thinker
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· Wants to be a journalist
· Wants to seek out opportunities in freelance
· Future GOAL: Columbia School of Journalism
· Future: Participate thoughtfully in public discourse
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2
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Ms. Kafner as 5th
grade teacher
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Looked forward
to learning
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Intern for town
clerk
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17- Realized
she was inspired by teacher
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grown as a
teacher
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models after
Kafner
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inspired to
become a teacher of History
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likely wants to
attend college for education
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** less clear**
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3- Ben
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family’s past
(Holocaust, former Soviet Union)
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risk-takers
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BU politics education
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BU letter
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‘underprivileged
immigrant’
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I am part of
this world
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Advocate
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Interested in
music and entertainment industry
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Risk-taker
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Ambitious
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Strong sense of
justice
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Desire to make
reasoned, logical arguments
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LAW student
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Use ambition to
help others treated unfairly (similar to himself/family)
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Run for public
office
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MINE WILL BE MORE
CLEAR—no inferences for reader…
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NARRATIVE-
experiences, family, examples of personal traits,
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SHOW vs. TELL-
show who you are
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1st
paragraph- WE paragraph- WORLD view…
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How will you HOOK
your audience?
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What’s this
ABOUT?
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To be ready to
leave the school- future
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At least one page
minimum, likely 2
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PAST, PRESENT,
FUTURE needs to be a part of your ESSAY
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